We live in
a 21th century, where almost everything depends on money and I think that every
person in his or her life dreams of richness and stability, in order to have
the life he or she wants. But
unfortunately being rich is not easy and you have to do a lot in order to earn
enough money for your life. So let us spotlight different steps that you have
to undergo to reach a success.
To begin
with I want to say that you have to have a lot of ingenuity and inventiveness to
earn money in the way you want, because it is a big deal. But in every situation we have different
counterexamples, for example, people who always live using the money of others.
It is so called a dubious success and I do not appreciate it. But it is
suitable for those who don’t make any efforts to reach something in their life.
But if you are an independent person and you want to reach everything yourself
you have to pave the way for your future career. For example, you can get acquainted
with different people such as investors, employees, retailers, suppliers,
producers etc. And if they are
benevolent and quick to sympathize they will help you to open your own company,
to get the picture of what is going on and not to get lost in it. Secondly, if you open your own business you
will face the competitors. In order not to bemoan them, you have to create
something absolutely brand new or just do thing which is much better than their
one. And down bellow you can watch a video "10 Steps to Starting a Business". There you can find some tips which can help you to be a successful person and become a businessman.
To sum up I
have to underline that open your own company is not easy and one should do a
lot in order to reach this goal. But if you already have it, remember that
being guile and vile will not help you to be rich. Be creative, ready to sacrifice,
try to use time properly and help people and soon you will see that they will
be trying to help you too, don’t be afraid of trying new things and if everything falls don’t give up.
The main idea of the post is answering the question: "How to become successful in business and life?". The post spotlights the ways of opening new business. To my mind, the introduction of this post is effective, as it turns the attention of the reader to our modern life and emphasizes the most crucial problems of nowadays live, such as: "money, success, job, stability, richness". The post has several key points, such as features of character one should possess to become successful, two possible ways of earning money ("dubious success" and real success), and the problem with competitors one way face with. All these points have examples, which illustrate specific features of character, different ways of lifestyle, and even the way of solving problem with competitors. The conclusion of the post is really effective, as it inspires to become better, to improve your skills and to set a goal. It warns about possible difficulties, but still encourages for work. There were used a lot of active words. Faults in spelling/ grammar: "in the 21st century", "to undergo steps" - " to overcome/ make steps", after word "counterexamples" it's better to use "for instance", in order to avoid tautology; "it is A so called"; "dubious success" without article; I can't get the meaning of the phrase "quick to sympathize"; "to bemoan competitors" - "to bemoan your fiasco"; "THE video"; "to underline" - "to accentuate"; "TO open your own company is not an easy thing to do..."; "if everything falls" - "if everything fails". Most of all I liked that this post has first of all personal point of view of the author and secondary the video, which can complement the information. The question is: tell more about planning time. As to my post, in comparison with this one it has less active words, but the overall idea is almost the same. To sum up, this post is quite useful and interesting, it inspires and encourages, it has an idea, good conclusion and introduction, key points, it has additional material (video), the mistakes are not serious, so give this post the highest point.
The main idea of this post is that to start one's own business is not easy. I would call the introduction effective because it is a vital topic for most people. The author describes us the ways how to reach success, they are also supported with her own poit of you ( about dubious success etc). There we can read about the difficulties we can face on our way and the author provides us with some tips how to overcome such obstacles. The conclusion is effective, it has the impact on readers to try and work harder. I have found some mistakes:" a dubious success" should be without article, "in a 21st century" should be with "the", "to bemoan your competitors" - this pharase is not understandable.It is not very correct to start the sentense with "but". "So called" -"so-called". It's good that there are many active words and personal thoughts. I would like to ask why many creative people can't rich success in life? In general the author managed to attract attention and to make the readers think.
The main idea of the post is answering the question: "How to become successful in business and life?". The post spotlights the ways of opening new business.
ВідповістиВидалитиTo my mind, the introduction of this post is effective, as it turns the attention of the reader to our modern life and emphasizes the most crucial problems of nowadays live, such as: "money, success, job, stability, richness".
The post has several key points, such as features of character one should possess to become successful, two possible ways of earning money ("dubious success" and real success), and the problem with competitors one way face with. All these points have examples, which illustrate specific features of character, different ways of lifestyle, and even the way of solving problem with competitors.
The conclusion of the post is really effective, as it inspires to become better, to improve your skills and to set a goal. It warns about possible difficulties, but still encourages for work.
There were used a lot of active words. Faults in spelling/ grammar: "in the 21st century", "to undergo steps" - " to overcome/ make steps", after word "counterexamples" it's better to use "for instance", in order to avoid tautology; "it is A so called"; "dubious success" without article; I can't get the meaning of the phrase "quick to sympathize"; "to bemoan competitors" - "to bemoan your fiasco"; "THE video"; "to underline" - "to accentuate"; "TO open your own company is not an easy thing to do..."; "if everything falls" - "if everything fails".
Most of all I liked that this post has first of all personal point of view of the author and secondary the video, which can complement the information.
The question is: tell more about planning time.
As to my post, in comparison with this one it has less active words, but the overall idea is almost the same.
To sum up, this post is quite useful and interesting, it inspires and encourages, it has an idea, good conclusion and introduction, key points, it has additional material (video), the mistakes are not serious, so give this post the highest point.
The main idea of this post is that to start one's own business is not easy.
ВідповістиВидалитиI would call the introduction effective because it is a vital topic for most people.
The author describes us the ways how to reach success, they are also supported with her own poit of you ( about dubious success etc). There we can read about the difficulties we can face on our way and the author provides us with some tips how to overcome such obstacles.
The conclusion is effective, it has the impact on readers to try and work harder.
I have found some mistakes:" a dubious success" should be without article, "in a 21st century" should be with "the", "to bemoan your competitors" - this pharase is not understandable.It is not very correct to start the sentense with "but". "So called" -"so-called".
It's good that there are many active words and personal thoughts.
I would like to ask why many creative people can't rich success in life?
In general the author managed to attract attention and to make the readers think.